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Shadow and Radiance

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On the west side of Eden
There is nothing but seven graves;
And in the dust, I hear voices chanting
But no bells ring.
Say it:
O for the radiance of a thousand suns
O I am become death, destroyer of worlds
O O O O

Until the rotting teeth
Fall from Golgotha's empty mouth
And tree's grow in the sockets,
Where pleading eyes
Used to be;
No one will know peace.

I used to bask in
The misty sunset's glow.
But now, even Valhalla's feasts
Seem quiet and empty.
I wonder if I'll ever
Get them right.

No wonder.
No wonder.
No wonder.

Those are pearls that were his eyes.
A nice little poem I put together. I think I got it right.

To the people at :iconthewrittenrevolution:: Does the meter of this work? Does it need more structure? Was the imagery comprehensible? Did you catch the references or were they too oblique? Any other advice?
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