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On broken stone by raging seas
And ghostly chapels in dead trees:
The sibyl, with the blinded eye,
Our prophet, chose to touch the sky.
And in your veins the blood will freeze,
From one last waltz on winter's breeze
The oily wings will melt with ease.
Now dropping with an eagle's cry
O'er broken stone.
In dryer parts of town than these,
The children pray on bended knees,
To become gods and learn to fly,
But we all know the hemlock's lie.
Old artificer, end this please,
On broken stone.
And ghostly chapels in dead trees:
The sibyl, with the blinded eye,
Our prophet, chose to touch the sky.
And in your veins the blood will freeze,
From one last waltz on winter's breeze
The oily wings will melt with ease.
Now dropping with an eagle's cry
O'er broken stone.
In dryer parts of town than these,
The children pray on bended knees,
To become gods and learn to fly,
But we all know the hemlock's lie.
Old artificer, end this please,
On broken stone.
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A BRIEF HISTORY OF DENTON HOLME
WRITTEN BY STEPHEN JAMES HYMERS.
DENTON HOLME TAKES ITS NAME FROM THE DENTON FAMILY,FORMERLY FROM CARDEW,WHO BOUGHT THE HOLME AROUND THE YEAR 1383.
THERE HAS BEEN A LOT OF INDUSTRIAL DEVELOPMENT AROUND THE DENTON HOLME AREA DURING THE 18TH AND 19TH CENTURY. LOSH & CO'S COTTON MANUFACTORY AND PRINTFIELD WAS FOUNDED IN DENTON HOLME IN 1779.
THE FAMOUS DIXONS MILL WAS BUILT IN 1835 AND THE CANAL BRANCH OF THE NEWCASTLE&CARLISLE RAILWAY WAS BUILT IN 1837,FERGUSON'S,COTTON DYERS AND FINISHERS MOVED INTO HOLME HEAD MILL IN AROUND 1828,BUT THE BUILDINGS THEY MOVED INTO DATED FROM 1800.
HOWEVER THE OPENING OF THE NELSON BRIDGE IN 1853 IS WHAT PRO
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He made his way along the path, trying desperately to recognize anything familiar. Anything that would confirm he was in the right place, or not.
Reaching the end of the sidewalk, he paused, taking in the surroundings.
His eyes scanned along the row of apartments, then down the walkway in front of him and along the street and sidewalk before focusing back on the building ahead. He let a slow breath blow between his lips, running his hands along his pants pockets; his nervous habit, noting to himself that his breathing was oddly consistent considering the agitation that was stirring in his stomach. The only thing worse than being right, he t
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forever and ever and ever
as in love with love and
life as i am,
i am struggling to accept that
good things can't last forever
and a touch
is simply
a touch, fleeting yet
so very beautiful & i'm so stuck
in my own (not so beautiful) brain
dreaming up things that i know
i don't even believe in,
but i want them
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In an experimentation with styles, I've made a nice little rondeau for you to read.
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what is more important, style or content? how do you feel about the last line here? is "o'er" alright? any suggestions for improvement?
Members: what is more important, style or content? how do you feel about the last line here? is "o'er" alright? any suggestions for improvement?
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In order to answer your questions, I will first start by saying that I find the poem enticingly seductive and alluring. Why? Firstly, because you have created an interesting, ethereal atmosphere, both through the choice of words and images. The mythological elements, as well as the rhyme scheme aid in this purpose. Hence I will answer that, at least in what I am concerned, I find style is, in some cases, more important than content. This is not to say that the lack of idea, theme or substance is a good formula; but exploiting the power and tastiness of words is something extraordinary. The fact that you have retold such a beautiful myth in such a sweet style and short length is golden. I find particularly beautiful the last verses, which divert us from the original space, and bring up a conclusive statement, which symbolizes Icarus's futile ambition.
As regards the o'er, I would say it is alright regarding the rhyme scheme you chose. However, I find it somewhat disruptive of the flow (maybe me reading it to a particular rhythm, so don't worry).
As regards improvement... Well, I think you have quite a dominion over style, henceforward I would suggest introducing substance. This means, the experimentation with the rondeau proved extremely effective, yet I felt there was something lacking in the message, some sort of vacuity. Most probably it is because of the rondeau's fixed scheme and brevity. In any case, this is but an opinion, hence feel free to challenge it.
PD: I love mythology, and commentary aside, I love the way you used the story.