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You and I, world – I think we have the same heart;
I think that you've got the same crazy bits stuck
Right behind everything you're made of.
You've got the same contradiction as I do
And I think I've gotten muddled in exactly the same way.
It's the most beautiful muddling. The prettiest one
That you could have.

It's the wind over the dry grasses and the white pine
And the hills of sandstone and old men's dying farms.
And it's the late night drives into nowhere
And the look of the joyful befuddlement.
And I think, world, that you and I
And all the other muddled people out there –
We'll get along all right. And maybe, I think we might,
If we're lucky and if the grasses flow just right in the breeze,
We can go down to the brook, world, and hold hands
And smile quietly and watch the geese
And smell the sweet rain over the rivers.
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Open your eyes, dear, it's nearly morning.

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~IsabellaMichel Jul 13, 2012  Student Writer
This has some great imagery and that first line just kills it! :) Wow.
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:iconheartofpoetry:
I really enjoy the flow of this poem. The symbolism is beautiful and there is something about the imagery that really plays at the heart strings. I read it a few times so I could relive it, it's beautiful. Your work is excellent. The relationship this represents seems so pure, the kind of relationship thats most coveted and you portrayed it perfectly :).
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~ProvenParadox May 14, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks, friend.
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:iconilyilaice:
the first stanza for me, could have stood on its own. i guess the second helps illustrate the point made in the first stanza, though. but that first stanza ... it just makes so much sense, and i was nodding the whole time i was reading it. lovely, lovely writing. well done!
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Mood: dA Love ~Mysterysolved96 Mar 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You just keep astonishing me with beautiful writing. I don't think anything I say can do this piece justice, so I'll just have to settle for the fact that it is truly amazing.
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~humatinee Mar 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutely love the last two lines of the first stanza. They made me smile. This is really very beautiful.

My only suggestion concerns the fifth line in the last stanza. As a reader, I feel like there is supposed to be a small shift there, and the fact that it carries on the "and" pattern hides that shift.
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it's too cute. i just can't.
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~marikob-k Jul 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I can just hear you reading this to a group of people huddled around a fire in the wilderness. Like bam.
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~ProvenParadox Aug 7, 2011  Student Writer
That would be the ideal location for any reading of poetry. I'm not sure if this poem is one to be read to people or one best overheard from a meaningful distance. But the wilderness, you are right about that.
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